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A Poem By Me

What Do You think Of My Poem?

Love It
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45%
Like It
8
40%
Its Ok
1
5%
Hate It
0
No votes
Burn It
2
10%
 
Total votes : 20

A Poem By Me

Postby Affray » Tue Oct 17, 2006 4:08 pm

Im bored right now so im going to post a poem that I wrote last year. The rhyme sceme is terrible, but im not really a poetry guy so I think it turned out ok. Tell me what you think of it .


The Beast
It, the thing that sleeps within my chest.
It, the thing that until now did rest.
All it took was one look at her,
And something deep within did stir.
Her skin so smooth, her eyes so deep.
The beast it yearns to rise up and reap
The reward that it desires most.
To touch her, feel her, to hold her close.
Alas. This want, this need, this love and care
For me she does not perceive nor share.
The beast lets loose a roar of defeat
And slumps his mighty head to sleep.
Until once more she finds my sight
And yet again we begin this plight
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Postby Affray » Thu Oct 19, 2006 8:28 pm

Nobody likes poetry around here?
I thought you were all into that stuff Oxy.
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Postby oxymoron » Fri Oct 20, 2006 4:22 pm

Didn't you see my vote? I loved it! Plus there's a slight amount of sex in it....
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Postby Affray » Mon Oct 23, 2006 2:24 pm

I didnt see your vote because I had not voted myself. Im good now though, thanks for voting.
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Postby vinnie~sk8r » Mon Oct 23, 2006 3:30 pm

its ok.. im not one to appreciate poetry. >.<
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Postby Brosuf » Mon Oct 23, 2006 3:53 pm

dude, Affray, you are a very good poet. you should, liek, write a book or something
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Postby Affray » Mon Oct 23, 2006 6:49 pm

Thats ok vinnie, I actually dont like poetry either. I just wrote this one during a time when i was feeling some extreme emotions. Most of my art stuff that i do that turn out any good are done while experiencing really extreme emotions. this one is the only poem though. Im more of a drawing kind of guy.

And thank you brosuf, but im thinking im not going to make a book, yet.
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Postby Jonathon » Mon Oct 23, 2006 9:54 pm

I love it....I voted to burn it though, cause I like fire. It's like the ultimate high school poem....:P
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Postby vinnie~sk8r » Mon Oct 23, 2006 10:04 pm

PYRO!!! lol
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Postby Affray » Tue Oct 24, 2006 5:51 am

This poem actually was burned once. I accidentally set it on my table and it happened to land on a candle and ignite pretty good. Somehow it survived though, and made its way on here.
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Postby morgana » Mon Dec 25, 2006 7:57 pm

I Liked. Because I like this kind of thing.
Don't know why I dind't choose "I loved"... Maybe because I can't love anything in this moment :(

But, go on... And post more poems in here!!!
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Postby Affray » Mon Dec 25, 2006 9:32 pm

Wow, I actually forgot that I posted this poem on here.
It is still the only good poem I have ever written.
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Postby morgana » Mon Dec 25, 2006 10:06 pm

Why don't you keep on writtning?
It would be great if we could have a poetry nerd.... You should post some of your poems and we could read and talk about...
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Postby Pi » Thu Jan 11, 2007 9:41 pm

i loved it! it's really good affray. :D

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Postby Dr J » Wed Oct 10, 2007 5:07 pm

'Tis peculiar how you start it in trochaic tetrameter then change to iambic tetrameter.
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